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Maybe showing an additional (desperate) step for those first coming in to the gym (heaven/purgatory/?), have Chris spend time researching what a proper workout is. That he knows to rotate from weights to lifts to running etc. is not something someone 'scared' of a gym would do, besides it would also help represent study (bible? buddhism? self-escalation?). Love the idea. A very slight more development would be great. If this is for a contest, it should definitely be a contender. I read it all the way through, on DA's odd-green screen, and I rarely do that - well done, regardless of your placing in some contest. This is complete and worthy of competition.
Thanks very much for your thoughts.
It's not scary exactly, but it's definitely creepy to think about. I really like this. Nice job. (: