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Still noon in the paddy fields
in Kerala, we sank a well
to stem the flow of desert,
but came up smelling of dust.
Watched rice plants wither as the slow sun
silenced resolve in angry glare,
and warm dry gusts scattered
hope to the four corners.

In Palakkad, an empty street, sold
to ten million-dollar-a-day death,
men nurse wounds and children.
The women have gone to find water-
when the supply runs altogether dry,
we may find out how to swallow
the dust.  Or our pride.  Lesson taught,
we shall learn to drink coke.

Still noon in the baking heat
within the walled compound, we
stand around on wounded feet
spreading slurry on the ground.
So here, at least, is water
(to dampen a capital purse)
So here we earn our living -
a litre a day (could be worse).

Outside, the world is barren,
the earth is cracked and bare.
As boreholes tap our reservoirs
at last we’ve learnt to share.
So desert soil is progress,
and bitter stench is joy.
Infected feet dance to the beat
of the jingle writer’s bitter-sweet
irrigation for the soul.
©2004-2009 ~futilitarian
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Inspired by this article, and many others like it. Still in progress.

Daily Deviation

Given 2004-12-31

Landlocked octopus in more home's than a Godzilla movie. More welcome than a dentist. Lasts longer than a city when empty. Coke by *futilitarian (Suggested by ~naught101 and Featured by `inennui)

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:iconkaujot:
Bravo! I enjoyed every bit of it, but this:

"So here, at least, is water
(to dampen a capital purse)
So here we earn our living -
a litre a day (could be worse)."

is my favorite. So poignant. So depressing. So wonderfully accepting.

The only changes I would make to this would be to ease the flow up. Especially around verb tense. It seems to get a bit weird in spots.

Very, very wonderful job.

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yes, there's a particular part where I couldn't get it to flow right no matter what I did. I'll keep trying :)

thanks.

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:iconyi3artist:
Interesting inspiration. Horrible event yes, but I've not heard of a poem being spurred by an article.
Reads a whole lot eaiser after knwoing the article - my mistake =)

I love the sarcasm. Especially,

"at last we’ve learnt to share.
So desert soil is progress,
and bitter stench is joy."

The "(to dampen a capital purse)" does seem to break the rythm.

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thanks. it's something I've been meaning to write about for a while, but finding that precise article spurred me on.

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:iconinebriate:
I don't say this often, but bless your amazing mind.

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blimey.

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:iconbigsur:
why the hell did i not read this earlier.

have a starrymajig my dear for being so damn good...


i wish this was the poem i had to anaylse for my english GCSE last week (cultural poetry)

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:iconfutilitarian:
Blimey again.

I assumed you were older, too.

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I noticed that with my old account, revealing my age lost me respect from other writers. it's sad but true, now I just stay quiet as much as possible - except, sometimes I reveal myself accidentally. damnit! ha.

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ha, no. my age on the internet tends to vary +/- about ten years. no worries, it was just a bit of a surprise.

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